I heard Mr Miller yelling Go, and we were off. I saw people passing me at the start of the race. I felt the wind blowing against my face. Further along the track, I heard somebody jogging behind me, they soon passed me and I didn't see who it was. I saw the race leader about fifty metres in front of me, with second place forty metres and third place only thirty metres away. I wonder what place I'll come this year. Closer and closer to the finish line we get. A minute or two later we leap over the ditch,
jog through the trees, jump over the balancing beam and sprint to the finish line coming sixth with Alexia in seventh.
jog through the trees, jump over the balancing beam and sprint to the finish line coming sixth with Alexia in seventh.
To Elizabeth When you heard somebody jogging behind you did you hear them huffing and puffing? I love the bit were you write I felt the wind blowing against my face.
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I could hear their footsteps for about two minutes until they passed me.
DeleteHi Lizzy,I think your blog post about cross country is amazing writing because it looks like you have put in a lot effort and time. But I am wondering who came 1st 2nd and 3rd? from your friend Lily.
ReplyDeleteIn first place there was Aoife, second was Hannah M and third was Isla.
DeleteDear Elizabeth, I think your blog post about cross country is an amazing piece of writing because your sentence 'Closer and closer to the finish line we get' is really effective. I wonder if you could add how you knew someone was jogging behind you were they puffing or could you hear their foot steps?. From Michala.
ReplyDeleteDear Elizabeth Iloved your post here is some advice. How did you know that they were behind you? Were they huffing and puffing or did you hear big steps? Keep it up by Oliver.
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ReplyDeleteI like your writing it has some punctuation and it is interesting.
I think that you should have added another I felt and when you said I heard somebody jogging behind me I think that you should of put down what you heard and that sentence
from Brynn.
Hi Elizabeth,
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said how far the lead Runner is away from you.
plus I liked how you said how long it was untill you were jumping over the ditch. And how did you fell after the race? By Riley